Unit 21: Evaluation of First Draft Pitch

Links:

• First Draft Pitch - click here.
• Presentation - click here.
• Presentation Notes - click here.
• Supporting Document: Title and Font Explained - click here.
• Supporting Document: Character Profiles - click here.
• Supporting Document: Plot Outline - click here.
• Supporting Document: Episode 1, Scene 1 Screenplay - click here.

Self Evaluation:

I think my presentation style could be improved, although I think I appeared quite confident with what I was doing I feel like my tone and body language could be improved. Instead of being leant against a table and reading from a sheet (with some additional comments) I feel I should but some more energy into my presenting. I need to practice the presentation some more so I don't need to refer to the notes as much but also stand up and show my excitement for the product more. Not only will this make the presentation more interesting but could also hopefully make the idea more appealing to executives. 

I thought the presentation itself was good. The titles throughout were themed with the programme and I tried to not include minimal writing so I wasn't just saying what was said on the screen - I used a combination of videos, images, diagrams and small amounts of text to support my speech. I believe this worked well and makes the pitch more engaging (as people have to actually concentrate on what is happening to mean they are more likely to remember). I believe the presentation could be made more visually appealing in parts - to do this I plan on making some more themed graphics in Illustrator and including images that feature symbols from throughout the programme.

My pitch did include the title of the production, an executive summary, statement of need (through links to the BBC mission statement). I feel like the budget was well stated and supported with research conducted by myself, however, I believe I could have discussed in more detail about specific production companies I could use and why. This can be done by researching production companies the BBC regularly uses and see if these would be appropriate. this will be added for the final pitch. In the presentation notes, I did write about style but forget to mention this when I was presenting the pitch, I will ensure to mention this next time as I believe this is one of the USPs of my production. 

My supporting documents are attached and were complete by the time of the pitch but I was unable to print them in time for the presentation so the audience members were unable to see them - I have since printed them so they will be ready for future presentations.


Questions Asked:

• How would you fairly represent all cultures and viewpoints in the film? How are you going to research this?
• How could it be developed into a second series?
• What is the aim of the product? Political?
• Would you portray pro-refugee and anti-refugee views or just one side?
• Quite expensive to film? How are you going to film border control scenes and channel crossing scenes?
• How does the pilot episode end?
• How will you find a Syrian Actor?
• What language is the Syrian Character's speaking?
• How will it fit into the BBC Three catalogue? How are you going to be the final piece of the jigsaw?
• How can you be more specific about the target audience? Other than age? Survey? Focus Group?

The questions asked by the audience were very useful. I will use this to help me improve my proposal for the final presentation. I will start my presentation talking about BBC Three as a platform and discuss how I think my programme will fit into there catalogue. I will then move on to discuss my programme specifically, with a brief overview of the plot followed by specifics on the pilot episode and how it can be made serial. I could even discuss how the programme could be 'binged' rather than released weekly. I also want to detail some potential actors I could use and also what production company. I will need to do further research to do this. Before the final presentation, I also want to conduct a survey which I can then use data from within my proposal to support my ideas.